Our first contribution!
The New Puppy
On day, a little girl named Harriet was on her way in the car with her mum to the seaside. When she looked out the window she saw a dog store. Harriet asked her mum"Can we go to that dog shop over there?" "Ok" replied her mum.When they arrived at the dog store, Harriet looked around and saw a puppy.It was called Rosie and she was a cute yorkshire terria.
So she asked her mum"Can I please buy this dog mum?" "If you want."said Harriet's mum.Then they went to get a bed,a bone,food, two bowls,sparkely, pink lead and a ball for Rosie.When they got home,Rosie played with her new,white bone in her bed.After a while,Harriet took Rosie for a walk to the park just around the corner.At the park, the two best friends played fetch together.
Finally,Harriet gave Rosie some food and water and then Harriet went to bed.
by Erin
Dear Erin,
ReplyDeleteWow, I really like the way you have included direct speech in your story! Can you remember what you have to do when a new speaker speaks? Perhaps this could be the start of several adventures Harriet and Rosie could have?
Warmly,
Mr. W.
Hi Erin,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story. Hopefully my story will be number two.
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Maddie
Hi Erin,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have used speech and punctuation.
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Grace
Dear Erin,
ReplyDeleteI love your story too, especially how you have used direct speech. Perhaps you could just read it over even more closely for any missing letters.
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Grace
DearErin,
ReplyDeleteI loved that story. It was amazing and brilliant!
By kelsey